Problem –
Solution Essay Draft-1b
Teenagers now have moved from “text me later” messages to
“sext me later”. According to the Oxford Dictionary sexting is the sharing of
explicit photographs or sexual text through mobile phones. As young as 10 year
olds send sexts to their friends. A survey shows that about 22% out of 410
grade seventh students in the U.S have participated in sexting (Younger, 2014).
Though it might be not that prevalent and serious in Singapore, sexting is
slowly gaining momentum among young teenagers of Singapore too.
Because of the rise of sending explicit pictures and sexual
texts among young teenagers of Singapore, the Ministry of Education should
introduce interesting classes in schools to educate the young about the dangers
of sexting on social networking sites and apps.
There are several reasons for teens to participate in
sexting. The first and the foremost one is that the pressure among the young
teens to gain popularity among their real friends as well as their virtual ones
on social networking sites (Rozen, 2015). And social media has proven to be a
powerful tool for the teenagers, who have gone to the extent of sharing their
nude selfies with their friends, to increase their popularity. Another reason
that prompts the teenagers to take such explicit pictures is due to hyper sexuality
– the increased sexual behaviour at a young age.
Many might wonder why such an unethical act is gaining popularity
among teenagers. A survey has revealed that often a teenager engages in sexting
only after he has received such. Though sharing of explicit photographs and
sexual texts are widespread, it is a pity that many do not know its long-lasting
effects and it can be against the law if caught.
Teenagers think that their personal pictures are kept safe on
their mobile phones. However, such data are retrieved somehow by sexual
predators. Sexual predators collect explicit pictures of oneself and blackmail
the person in the picture to send more or to meet them in person. One such case
was dealt in Wisconsin, USA. David weaver, 51 from Cedarburg, disguised himself
as a young girl and collected explicit pictures and videos of more than 100
children across the country (Siewert, 2015). Even if a teenager does not get into
any such troubles as mentioned above, they might face issues in the future.
They might not even know that their sexts have been leaked out and that these
can pose problems when they apply for universities or jobs in the future.
Clearly, the grievous consequences stated above creates the
urgency to stop the teenagers from sexting at an early stage.
Many nations have implemented various measures to curb this
trend among young teenagers. Depending upon the circumstances, a teenager
sending, receiving or possessing explicit pictures or sexual texts can be
prosecuted. In Singapore, sexting is dealt under Undesirable Publications Act
(Ho, 2010). However, actions are only taken upon a complaint. Due to unclear and penalties, a teenager would not file a complaint against the person who would have misused the sext that the teenager has sent. This is because the teenager, though being the victim, might fear of being prosecuted for sending such unacceptable texts or pictures in the first place (Computerworld Singapore, 2012).
As cases related to sexting are more in the west, legal
measures are carefully drafted keeping in mind that there are children under
the age of 18 involved in such cases. For example in Texas, a law has been
passed that performs a misdemeanour on the initial attempt of sexting by a
minor. If the child finishes his or her sexting education course, the child is
sentenced to community supervision. This
law has clear penalties and drafted specially for the teenagers. This will not
affect their lives as much as if they are sentenced to the same penalty of an
adult, like imprisonment.
As even though,
sexting has become widespread and have led to critical cases in the U.S, a
survey shows that not many students know it is illegal. Hence, before sexting
becomes a major issue in Singapore, the students have to be educated on this
sensitive issue. Almost all schools in Singapore conduct talks and class
discussions on cyberbullying. These help educate youngsters generally on how to
protect themselves in the cyber world. However, the Ministry of Education
should focus on sexting particularly as it is now the new trend. It will be
very effective if sexting and other related issues are dealt as an ungraded
subject introduced as early as in primary schools. The content can be modified
so that it is appropriate for different age groups. In higher and secondary
level, the moral and ethical conduct on social networking sites and apps can be
taught along with religious and ethnic beliefs. This will not alone help to
reduce the trend of sexting among Singaporean teenagers but also promises to
develop the future generation with lesser sex crimes and issues like teenage
pregnancy. Such an optimistic statement can be strongly supported by a study
referred in the article “‘Sexting’
initiates sexual behaviour among teenagers: study” (2014) that
has been conducted in the United States. It shows that teenagers who are
sexting are at high chances of being sexually active.
In conclusion, in a city like Singapore which is constantly
under the external influences, it would not take a long time for sexting to
become prevalent situation. As teens are lured to sext due to their
misconceptions and wrong believes about sexual life it is necessary for the
Ministry of Education to formulate a course or subject in school to cultivate good
values and ethics which will discourage immoral activities like sexting at a
young age. However, one has to think. Did not sexting started among the adults
first and then later taken up by the teens. So should not the adults be also
educated on ethical conduct on social networking sites and apps?
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Reference:
1) Younger,
S. (2014, January 6). Nearly a quarter of seventh graders are sexting –what
parents can do about it. Chicagonow. Retrieved from http://sg.theasianparent.com/sexting/
2) Rozen,
C. (2015, January 28). How social media is making teens unhappy. Sun sentinel. Retrieved from http://www.sun-sentinel.com/teenlink/fl-tl-how-social-media-is-making-teens-unhappy-20150128-story.html
3) Siewert,
S. (2015, February 20). Swapping nude images spells trouble for teens. Postcrescent.com Retrieved from http://www.postcrescent.com/story/news/investigations/2015/02/20/teen-sexting-rise-wisconsin/23691927/
4) Ho,
V. (2010, April 12). ‘Sexting’ carries stricter laws in Asia. ZDNet. Retrieved from http://www.zdnet.com/article/sexting-carries-stricter-laws-in-asia/
5) Sexting penalties too harsh: study. (2013, April 12). Computerworld Singapore. Retrieved from
http://www.computerworld.com.sg/resource/legal/sexting-penalties-too-harsh-study/
6)‘Sexting’ initiates sexual behaviour among
teenagers: study. (2014, October 6). Gulfnews.com.
Retrieved from http://gulfnews.com/news/world/usa/sexting-initiates-sexual-behaviour-among-teenagers-study-1.1394863
1. What do you like the best about the ideas in this essay? Be specific. (precise vocabulary, cohesive/linked ideas, clear/easy to follow discussion, convincing, effective reasoning/argument, well-developed ideas, well-supported topic sentences, understandable transitions, etc.)
The idea is rather original, this is not a topic which is discussed often. There is good reasoning supported by sources.
2. Is there a clear, narrowly-focused problem presented in the essay? Is it contextualized in the intro? Is it expressed well in the thesis?
Yes there is. It is well defined at the start of the essay. However, given that sexting in a region is hard to verify and the data for the prevalence of sexting quoted is for another country, perhaps more can be done to establish that “ sexting is slowly gaining momentum among young teenagers of Singapore too”
3. How well is the first solution described? How effectively is that solution evaluated?
The first solution described is the “undesirable publications act”, it is effectively evaluated as one which does not solve the problem. In fact, the act may not have been implemented to solve the problem, but to safeguard the interest of Singapore citizens.
4. How well is the second solution described? Is it effectively connected to a positive outcome?
The second solution described is education. I believe that education will result in a positive outcome.
5. Are there any ideas in the essay that need further development? Which parts of the essay require further elaboration?
Convincing the reader that this is/ will become a serious problem in Singapore.
6. Does the writer effectively use outside source material to illustrate the problem and/or the solutions?
Yes.
7. What is your impression of the flow of the content?
There is logical flow in the essay.
8. Are there any ideas in the essay that are not clear or that you find confusing? Underscore/ highlight these.
No
9. Are the citations used in this essay appropriate? Are the reporting verbs effectively used? Does the reference list adhere to the APA guidelines?
Yes
10. Can you give a couple specific suggestions for how the writer could most improve this essay?